Circle story

i agree it would make our story way longer then it has to be and a complete waste of time

*sighs* Fine.

but seriosly you should go back and edit ur post so that it is more grammatically correct

he is doing fine this is my thread and i dont care about grammer or spelling

Well, this isn't your forum, and the rest of us here do like good grammer.

but i came up with the circle story idea

true but that does not mean it belongs to you and nobody else

ok

Yeah, it was definetly a great idea, thanks for coming up with it, but the rest of us would really prefer that it had better grammer.

I'm in a hurry right now so i can't.

Then don't bother posting.

STOP FIGHTING BOYS...............its not healthy

Boys, that's enough! esac, please use proper grammar and spelling, and if you don't have time to do it properly, don't do it at all! Now, back to the story!!!

Then, after their meal, they set off towards the Beor Mountains to return to the Varden. Along the way, another group of Urgals attacked them. Brom lopped of 2 of their heads in one stroke, while Ajihad stabbed one and turned, using the momentum of his stab to cut off another Urgal's legs. After dispatching all the Urgals, they continued on, with a few minor injuries.


WOW! That was gory!!


And esac, Plz use proper grammar, ar leats in your story posts. I HATE BAD GRAMMAR!!!!!!!!

Brom looked down at his bleeding leg. "We need to bandage our wounds." Brom said to Ajihad. "Later right now we need to concentrate on getting to Tronjiehiem." Ajihad replied. "Oh right." Brom said as they continued on in silence.
Finally they came to a stop in the evening. Brom looked up and saw that the Beor Mountains were much closer then before. "We're getting closer." Brom commented to Ajihad. "Yes. We should be there in two or three days." Ajihad replied as he was getting the fire going. "I'll keep watch tonight." Brom told Ajihad. "Ok that's fine with me." Ajihad said. Ajihad took of the finished stew and gave some to Brom. They ate in silence.

I told you guys I sucked at writing! I think I spelled Tronjiehiem wrong....

(Aravelle: it is spelled Tronjheim!)

Over the next several days Brom, Ajihad, and the egg made there way to the gates of the varden....were they were rushed inside without any words....

Brom walked through the gates, Ajihad at his side. Out of no where, the Twins appeared.
"Wait," one of them said. "We must confirm your identity before letting you pass."
"Of course," the other one said, "We can't risk Galbatorix sending spies into the Vaden." Brom could have sworn that he breifly saw him smirk. But of couse not... the Twins had always been loyal....
"Alright," Brom replied with a sigh, opening his mind. After a few twinges of discomfort, they let him pass. They had learned not to cause him much pain long ago.
Ajihad passed a moment later, and they headed towards Hrothgar's throne room, a guard of dwarves in tow. Brom didn't think that it was neccissary, but the Twins had insisted. Their captain, a young dwarf named Orik, led them swiftly through the tunnels to the large doors that concealed the enourmus throne room.

Wow, the story really is coming along great, eh?

C'mon, someone needs to continue it!

The Dwarves quickly opened the doors and Brom and Ajihad walked down the aisle to where Hrothgar was sitting on his throne
"Welcome," he said in a booming voice.
"Thank You for allowing us to see you Hrothgar," Brom said.

im not good at righting stories at all

You're not all that bad. You just need a bit of experience. Do you think that my parts are okay? I've like never written anything...

better than mine

Back on topic.

then don't post!

BAck on topic!