The book I'm writing...

this is part of chapter 3 in the book I'm writing. I hope you enjoy it!!

RoyalWing laid draped over the mountain. Young-nowings travel fast. Faster than usual. Small-wings follow them. They are small-wing-Rydier. Small-wings bring destruction to Maeona.
RoyalWing jumped of the side of the mountain and dove toward the young dragons and their Rydiers.
“Look to the sky! Attack her, ShameWing and HateWing!’’ cried the oldest of the traveling Rydiers.
Two black dragons shot out of the clouds above RoyalWing. She dodged them and tore one of the black dragon’s tendons. The dragon screamed in agony. RoyalWing turned and dove towards the other dragon....


That's all I have of chapter 3. if you want the rest, i'll post it here later.

here's that and a little more:

RoyalWing laid draped over the mountain. Young-nowings travel fast. Faster than usual. Small-wings follow them. They are small-wing-Rydiers. Small-wings bring destruction to Maeona.
RoyalWing jumped of the side of the mountain and dove toward the young dragons and their Rydiers.
“Look to the sky! Attack her, ShameWing and HateWing!’’ cried the oldest of the traveling Rydiers.
Two black dragons shot out of the clouds above RoyalWing. She dodged them and tore one of the black dragon’s tendons. The dragon screamed in agony. She dove and kicked the other dragon straight down into the mountain. The other dragon twitched and fell still.
“She’s going to kill us all! Run!” shouted one of the Rydiers whose dragon she’d just killed.
That’s right, fear me two-legs-no-wings. Run like the cowards that your kind are!

here's chapter one::

One cold, rainy fall day, a boy of seventeen named Will, went outside to fetch the mail. The air was frigid and cold.
When he got outside, he saw on the ground, a phial with a liquid that looked as clear as glass in front of a huge medieval castle. Will gasped at the sight of it. It was taller than three two story houses stacked on top of each other.
Then, the phial started to glow and Will felt the cold air go away from around him. He gaped at the phial.
Will looked toward the castle that towered above him. He decided to go inside the castle because he thought he heard a voice calling for help.
As Will walked through the castle, he was unaware that two people were following him around. These people was a cat that could talk to people named Astra and an Elven lady whose name is Awen.
Will stopped at a flight of stairs. He was hesitant to go up the stairs because he was wondering if an unknown danger awaited him up that flight of stairs.
He ascended up the flight of stairs after deciding that he could handle the danger on his own.
Welcome to Valinor, the great Elven city, a sign near the top of the staircase that was carved into stone by the works of the dwarves.
“Well, at least I know what the city’s name is,” thought Will.
Suddenly, he turned around. Right behind him, he saw an Elven lady holding a cat. Her hands were slender like willow bark. Her hair was the color of gold. Her eyes were as bright as shining, sublime sapphires. Her profoundly pointed ears stood out. Her dress that she was wearing was as white as fresh fallen glittering snow. It looked as if it had genuine pearls sewn on it. She had a shawl that looked as thin as angel’s wings. It made her look like a fair and noble princess of a far away land. Seeing the fact that she was an Elf, Will thought that she was the Elven Princess.
“Who are you and what the heck do you want with me?” asked Will.
“I am Awen, the fair lady of Valinor. I can show you the way out but it is filled with peril and danger. If you don’t get out of here by sunset, you are bound to the castle as I am. You will never see your world again.”
“How do we get out of here by sunset?” replied Will.
“I will lead you to the person who can get you out if and only if you promise I can go with you so I can go to Elvesmera to get my inheritance of the throne,” answered Awen.
“You’re a princess? If you are, my sister will never believe me,” asked Will.
“To answer your question simply, Yes. I am a princess of Valinor,” replied Awen, “Now, let’s go find the person who knows the way out. By the way, my cat’s name is Astra in Elvish. In the common tongue, her name is Star.”
Awen began to climb up the next flight of stairs that was up ahead. Will hesitated. He didn’t know if he could trust Awen but he followed her up the stairs.
Half way up the stairs Awen murmured, “We will need a warning, or tocsin.” As she said that, Astra jumped out of her arms and ran up the stairs.
“What the-,” What Will was about to say was lost by a furious meowing coming from up the staircase.
“Come on! Run, Will, Run!” Awen cried as she ran up the stairs.
They ran up the stairs for about half an hour. When they got to the top of the staircase, Awen told Will, “Astra was meowing like that because she saw someone coming up the stairs behind us. Well, anyway.”
Will gasped at the sight of a glass dome that held an exquisite lady inside of it.
Her slender hands were folded below her ribs. Her lovely hair was as pure as gold. Her eyes were fair and unclosed. She was wearing a dress that look like it was made of sapphires. The dress matched her eyes.
“That was my mother before she died,” murmured Awen.
“That was your mother? You resemble her in your hair, eyes, and slender hands,” replied Will.
“Thank you. That phial you found was my mother’s phial. I threw it out the window in hope you would find it. The phial grants any wish the holder wishes,” answered Awen, “Would you like to stop at Elysium to rest?”
“I am getting a little tired,” Will said while yawning.
“Follow me,” replied Awen

When they got up the stairs to Elysium, Will gaped at the sight of a huge city that looked like it was added into the side of a mountain.

“Come now. We must go see the queen and beg her to show you the way out of this castle,” Awen whispered.
Will nodded and they began to run to the castle with Astra trailing behind them.
Will halted behind Awen a little bit. He touched something friable, or easily crumbled. It crumbled into a fine powder.
“Here, take this,” Awen told Will as she handed him a cudgel, “In case you really need it or we are unfavored in our proposition to the queen.”
“Thanks, but I don’t know how to use it if I really needed it,” replied Will, “May I ask why and how your mother got this pellucid, or transparent phial?”
“I will explain it to you after we meet with the queen,” Awen replied sharply, “The story of how my mother got the limpid, or clear phial, is a story that only four people can tell who are Astra, a plumed serpent named Gildas, the queen of Elysium, and I. I shall imply you to be soundless, or rather be quiet. Remember, don’t speak until spoken to.”
They had arrived at the castle gate. Awen threw open the door with incredulous strength. Will gazed at her with wonder. She pushed the guards aside effortlessly.
“Let me in! I shall know an old friend after I have seen her after waiting one hundred years!” cried Awen. She whispered to Will, “We used to be good friends, inseparable we were. Her name is Angel. She looks like me but has brown hair and emerald green eyes and has an emerald green dragon named Emerald. ”
“Is that you, my old friend? If it is, I am going to scream, softly so it won’t hurt you ears. Who is that? A stray traveler you picked up? Where is your dragon? It would be much quicker,” cried Angel in anguish.
“His name is William, shortened to Will. And yes, it is I, old friend. Please don’t scream. My dragon is following behind me, keeping watch, you know,” replied Awen.
“I was looking forward to seeing her again. Maybe go train for a battle or a war,” grumbled Emerald, “That would be fun to do.”
“She is also very eager to see you again, Emerald,” replied Awen. Addressing Angel, Awen stated, “ Right now, I am on my way to claim my inheritance of the throne in my order ofprimogeniture, or the state of being the first-born of a profound number of siblings, who all want the throne. Will would like to know if you can show him the way out of the castle so he will not be bound to the castle as we are.”
“Why don’t you take the throne at Nari? You=2 0could usurp, with the right to do it, the throne from Charon, the one who defeated the elves and their dragons in the times of old,” replied Angel enthusiastically.
“No. If I did take the throne at Nari, I would be a queen, but cruel and proud. I would be terrible, but great.” A cruel, harsh smile formed on Awen’s lips.
“But Charon has slaughtered his people by the use of the dark kayiik riders he uses still today. The dark kayiik riders were elves transformed into murdering, dark black shadows. He also has Titan and Deimos; his two most faithful servants ” pleaded Angel vigorously.
“I will upbraid, or scold you harshly. I have told you no thrice all ready. Now, silent your tongue of this matter. We both have pressing to deal with now. I with the Hyperion and you with the Ossian,” scolded Awen.
“I will show you to your rooms; you must be exhausted!” cried Angel.

NICE!!

thanks!! Chapter 2 is lost. i have to find it.

It sounds like an eragon redoing some names sound the same like Elvesmera to Ellesmera and angela is in it.
How did she get there? Wheres solembaum or whoever?

its a long story but at least i have the End of it done!!!

I love your story! I would buy it!

EmilyNowell wrote:

I love your story! I would buy it!

Really? Wow but it most likely won't happen. It might not come out...

nice

ElvishPrincess wrote:

EmilyNowell wrote:

I love your story! I would buy it!

Really? Wow but it most likely won't happen. It might not come out...

...because i need alot of money to publish it *coughs $1,000 coughs*

dang really

ya! I have the next part of the book right here::


Chapter Two: The Challenge

A few feet away, a girl of 15 named Treopsis was crouching down below a flowering Athens Bush. She was listening to a dialog between Angela and Awen.
“Set up the defense around the pike men, foot soldiers, and magicians. Put dragon friends where needed. We will need everyone we can get to fight Charon and his dragon, ShadowBlack,” commanded Awen to someone Treopsis couldn’t see.
“Carwyn and Tlacog, get Rydiers Victory, Galatyra, and Akronya. Also, have them bring their dragons with them. Send Elf Heathwia to me,” issued Angela.
Suddenly, a huge gust of wind swept through the clearing. A huge golden dragon landed heavily on her front right leg. It was bleeding profoundly.
“We were attacked by Camia,” panted Galatyra, “She told us this: At dawn of the third day from now, we will meet again for your answer for war.”
“Then we shall be ready for war in three days time. The mountain of Karkana has seven more days until it becomes a portal out of the castle,” replied Carae calmly as if nothing had happened.
“I disagree completely. If we get Will out of Maeonia through the gateway in the sky, we can escape before Charon’s plan comes true: to blow William’s world up into shreds all the while blowing up Maeonia,” complained Awen, loudly, “If we fight, it shall be a Pyrrhic victory. Remember Carae, my word will always win over your, only because I am Supreme Ruler over Maeonia. Remember, dragons bow to me; dwarves made me my silver sapphire crown; Giants fight at my command. Always remember that.”
Carae bowed and then replied, “I am dwarfed by your power, my queen. I shall never forget that, my queen.”
“Remember that or my wrath on thee will be great. I don’t want to be the cruel and harsh queen that I can be.” Whispered Awen, almost silently.
“I shall remember that, my queen. I dread your rancor.”
“You should, should it happen at the time of gloaming on a sylvan mountain.”



Awynyn’s Memories
The hushed silence was broken by the canorous singing of a fair, golden-haired Elf. The Elf was standing next to a a female Elf. His melodious voice vibrated in the air.
“You ebullient and pulchritude scion and nonpareil elf. You forlorn malediction.”
“I am a moribund elf, Gaerund. I am dying. My passing will be soon, sooner than I wish it to be.”
“But the fact that our daughter will be alone, what will happen?”
“I will give her everything that I own and I will give her ever gift that I can give her, magically.”
“But what if she doesn’t inherits the magical ability? Then, what will she do?”
“She will be ethereal when she gets older, just like her mother. Just as pale, like a snow white lily. Fair and lithe as a wolf. Undying like one of the ancient ones.”
“What if they ostracize her for her beauty? What if they send her to the kayiik?”
“Why would they send her to those wraiths? Would the kayiik turn her into one of them?”
“I would think that they would torture her to death and then, she would give into the pain.”
“I don not think that the kayiik’s master would let them inflict such pain on her.”

Here's the very long list of characters::


Awen- a red haired Dragon Friend, very fair and very young; dragon friend to RoyalWitch.
Carae- a blonde haired Dragon Friend with slender build; dragon is RoyalFlight; one of the nine space lords.
Kevin- a raven-haired boy; part of a prophecy with Karkana; dragon is unknown for now.
RoyalWitch- a sapphire blue dragon; one of the two first dragons of Maeonia.
RedWing- eldest daughter of RoyalWitch; blood red.
Galatyra- a red haired Dragon Friend like Awen; Dragon Friend is SpiritWing.
Space and Time Lords- a group of people who can control time and space; will be listed here.
Psyche- a blonde hair Dragon Friend who always wears a white dress with a golden sash; dragon is MysticWing, one of the nine time lords.
Gaia- Goddess of the Dragons.
Tlacog- blonde haired; apprenticed to Angela; dragon is FireWind.
Carwyn- a beautiful red haired dragon friend; apprenticed to Awen; dragon is RoyalWing.
SpiritWing- a golden dragon; Rydier is Galatyra.
FireWind- very high spirited, hard to handle by all but Rydier Tlacog.
Tlac- blonde haired; twin is Tlacog; dragon is WindWing; is no longer Awen’s apprentice.
WindWing- a green dragon; Rydier is Tlac.

Dragonforcerules wrote:

It sounds like an eragon redoing some names sound the same like Elvesmera to Ellesmera and angela is in it.
How did she get there? Wheres solembaum or whoever?

It's not fan fiction!! It needs some tweaking but I will do that l8tr.

ok, sounds cool so far though.

ElvishPrincess wrote:

Dragonforcerules wrote:

It sounds like an eragon redoing some names sound the same like Elvesmera to Ellesmera and angela is in it.
How did she get there? Wheres solembaum or whoever?

It's not fan fiction!! It needs some tweaking but I will do that l8tr.

Hey would you please stop double- and triple-posting? Thanks.

dude what do they not get about triple posting but i think double posting is fine

sorry wont happen anymore

double is ok, but if you need to do 3, just edit your 2nd post.

exactly

k. i have parts of the 4th 5th and 6th chapters done

cool

nice!

its so hard to get a full 25 page chapter done in a day but i have over 25 chapters so....