Eragon poetry

Here's where you can post Eragon related poetry.

This is one of my 1st FFs I wrote. It's supposed to be repititive, so sorry if that bugs you. Also, it's from Eragon's perspective, and I think you can figure out the rest!

The Black Dragon

It was the black dragon
With menacing jaw
Who destroyed his own kind
With fire, tooth, and claw

It was the black dragon
With his master so old
Together, they were the cause
From a tale scarcely told

It was the black dragon
With no true friends
Who rules Alagaesia
His reign knows no end

It was the black dragon
With scales of ebony
Who retreated from his lair, Uru’baen
To come and capture me

It was the black dragon
With endless black eyes
Who entered the battleground
And dominated the blood tainted skies

It was the black dragon
So powerful and strong
He swiftly destroyed
The Varden’s whole throng

It was the black dragon
Heartless and cruel
That slain my love
And with her, took me

It was the black dragon
Heart filled with scorn
He was the reason
My heart is now torn
My life worthless

So after the battle
I escaped to the sea
Forever I left
My home and my love
All those dear to me

The reason I left?
You may ask?
What was the cause?
To think I could have saved her
From Shruikan’s menacing jaws

I just wasn’t quick enough
I was too late
And from my own folly
I sealed her fate

This is to Arya
My one true love
Wherever you are
I hope that you hear this
Hopefully, from the heavens above

That was awesome. I don't have much. umm...
Go, Eragon, GO!
I'm voting for Yo!

I can draw manageably though.

You really liked it? Really, Apollo? I almost threw it out, I didn't like it at first, but it grew on me.

Wow! Great meaning, I love the focus on Eragon's heart. Nothin' better than a tragic love poem! Rhyme scheme was pretty good, some stanza issues, but it didn't take away from the poem at all. One constructive criticism though, (and I wouldn't have even known what exactly was wrong if I hadn't studied it in English this year) the meter and the foot were...well, pretty much non-existent. If you can make them consistent then it would be even greater! (You know what I'm talking about right? Like iambic pentameter is a really common one...or trochaic dimeter, dactylic tetrameter, etc.?)

Yah lost me tempest. Let's talk about simpler things. like rakatan tech. or class four HRDs. Or Ithorian language.

Ya, I forgot to get rid of that large gap. It was 2 pages long and I had it saved on my computer, so that's why the large gap was there. And what do you mean with the metric system stuff? I don't recall ever putting anything like that in the poem...

You know, I'v always wanted an HRD... Any way, Meter and Foot?Iambic Pentameter? To me, it's just a good poem.

Hey guys, matt accepted my picture of Shruikan! Anyway, an HRD is an Human Replica Droid. Ithorians have four throats and two mouths. And the Rakatans built the Star Forge, a superweapon that makes the Death Star look lame. Basically, Tempest seriously confused me.

Sorry! I'm big on Literature and poetry and English stuff...I probably got a bit carried away...

It's fine. I can be a real picky editor too. I know what you mean now. Thanks for the message explaining it, Tempest!

This is a good poem, i never heard anything like it so its really good, rhymes so it good, as tempest said some stanza issues but appart from that its really great

Thanks. It's funny, I came up with it when I was supposed to be working on my history homework one night. It just kinda came to me. A writer's spark, I call it.

Who cares about the gramatical issues, i am also obsessed with grammar(though i usually dont practice it) but thst poem was awsume!

Thanks Spike!

i came up with this after i read yours




Once in every lifetime
by
Alex Cook


Once in a land,
of magic and skill,
there lived a young boy,
who stalked very still.

The deer that he hunted,
evaded him twice,
No tracking back now,
he would be victorious,

Through forests and and mountains,
he was lead by the doe,
till he saw a clearing,
of which nobody knows,

he pulled back the string,
on his short bow,
he had her now,
there was nowhere to go,

But then an explosion,
had rocked the charmed land,
and so the young doe,
had gone off and fled,

that was the day,
that fate shined on him,
for the stone he had found,
was a mystery to them,

in truth it was an egg,
behind its enchanted guise,
and from it hatched a dragon,
of dazzling bright blue eyes,

But now he must flee,
for the king of this land,
was a tyrant of greed,
and quite a madman,

he wanted the dragon,
he feared for his power,
so he sent his dark minions,
to kill our young rider,

through snow and through ice,
led by an invisible rope,
the trio grew stronger,
they were the last hope,

but then on that dark day,
the minions had caught them,
they were doomed now,
till a brave archer freed them,

though the boy would live,
not so for his teacher,
he died very slowly,
taking his secrets with him,

and after that dark hour,
no more smiles did they give,
they were out for survival,
they were trying to live,

driven by instinct,
they crossed the great plain,
in hopes of finding help,
of which none came,

they joined the resistance,
it was their last hope,
their days of peril were over,
or so they had thought,

the monsters had followed them,
they were invading the city,
all men were ready,
it was a great pity,

led by the kings demon,
they proved a tough fight,
and through the tunnels,
a battle erupted that night,

but though they won,
they faced a heavy loss,
but none so great as the boy,
who had payed a great cost,

he was scarred forever,
the wicked shade had cursed them,
and though he prevailed,
a great sickness had hurt him,

but he did not know of this now,
they had just won the fight,
and that is how a boy and his dragon,
saved us all in that one night........

Excellent summary of Eragon through poetry!

yes, applause applause!

eragon, young country boy
Roam with Brom in company
And Saphira, dragon friend
Go from home and seek revenge
Of Garrow’s death, upon Ra’zac
Never shy from dangers great

Always heed your wise old friend
Now, when he is with you still, for
Death is near to Brom the Rider

Set out for Gil’ead with Murtagh
Arrive to find an elf and shade
Protect Arya ’cross the desert
Hadarac is perilous
In Tronjheim meet new friends and old
Raging battle, fight your best
Always now to bear your scars, Eragon Shadeslayer

Pretty good. I like it better than Spike's.

why thank you i liked spikes though it was random and i like random

who doesn't?

Did you read my poe, the black dragon? I didn't see any reviews by you...

no not yet were is it

It's on the 1st page of this thread, and I think it's the 2nd post.